She Fills The Light

• LeftBallBigger

  9 Oct 04, 05:41

  Let your mind free
  Think of the number zero
  Think of zero in all itÂ’s nothing
  Think of a 3d blank
  There is nothing there
  
  She comes into the light
  her body fills the zero
  do you see her
  you must for she fills every space
  
  You love her
  you lust her
  you want her
  your life is but for her
  
  SheÂ’s the living dream
  The dream you are blessed with
  Never forget this dream
  
  
• LazerLordz

  9 Oct 04, 11:27

  Quite simple yet sharp and clear piece of work.Let's see more from you.
• LeftBallBigger

  9 Oct 04, 21:01

  Originally posted by LazerLordz:

  Quite simple yet sharp and clear piece of work.Let's see more from you.

  Thanks for your kind comments!
  My poetry suxs i think..
  But trying to dabble a bit ...
  
  Cheers
• DeadPoet

  27 Oct 04, 21:59

  Originally posted by LeftBallBigger:

  Thanks for your kind comments!
  My poetry suxs i think..
  But trying to dabble a bit ...
  
  Cheers

  I do agree with LazerLordz. You poem are simple and straight to the point. Clearly you have your own style of writing. I can also see that you are a very creative person. Your poems offer a different/fresh perspective to the readers.
  
  But a word of caution, some readers may not be able to accept them. But donÂ’t take it personally, it is YOUR poems. So continue to write and develop your skills. Well done.