Poetry exercise :)
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No lah, just to share some of my opinions only.Originally posted by choco B:Ah...feeling of having my work graded brings me back to school days ..
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The pleasure is mine.Originally posted by I_am_PeTe_Parker:
I hope to have a few poem posted here soon. Shall I say – you have just given me the motivation . -
Found a new friend!Originally posted by HENG@:yo man. yeah. i guess we do. but trust me, it ain't that effortless. got MSN or other contacts? cheerio to u too. -
tare, need my help to sharpen the hunting knife?Originally posted by the Bear:Mr tare would kill me
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yes thank uOriginally posted by DeadPoet:tare, need my help to sharpen the hunting knife? 
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DP u put tat poem in the hall of inspirations??!!!
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Er... I think it is very nice mah.Originally posted by tare:DP u put tat poem in the hall of inspirations??!!!
Well written leh. -
Let the bear hunting season begins!Originally posted by tare:yes thank u -
haha. yeah.Originally posted by DeadPoet:Found a new friend! -
btw, hows the 2nd poem?
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Bad Cook to His Guinea Pigs (bad poem too)
Please lah!
O come on!
Eh, don't liddat!
Try some lah!
I don't care!
Chomp it down!
Very good!
Eat some more!
Relax lah!
Slow and steady!
Eat finish liao! -
hehee... great poem with a localized flavor!
who dare say singaporean not poetic?! -
shall i come up with another?
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Originally posted by the Bear:shall i come up with another?
Think I better run for cover. -
Originally posted by sillyme:Bad Cook to His Guinea Pigs (bad poem too)
Please lah!
O come on!
Eh, don't liddat!
Try some lah!
I don't care!
Chomp it down!
Very good!
Eat some more!
Relax lah!
Slow and steady!
Eat finish liao! -
Brother Heng, to tell you the truth, I have never commented on such a ‘technical’ poem before.Originally posted by HENG@:Pedal to the metal,
Overboosting turbo whizz.
Elongating scenery,
Testimony to warp speeds.
Indeterminate destination,
City circuit is my own creation.
Velocity approaching infinite,
Effortlessly rushing towards near-disaster.
Right out of the blue, a red triangle!
Skills and training take over,
Ending my journey,later, a thankful survivor.
But what I like about this poem is the sense of urgency and speed. I can visualize myself sitting beside the driver as he zooms along the race track. Cool.
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Poetry is fun,
Only hard to rhyme.
Every verse can be dense,
Though it hardly makes any sense.
I never finish writing any poem on time,
Charming neither a child nor any sensible one.
Vibrant stanza in the line,
Every word dancing on rhythm,
Recitals prancing on the mind,
Sung as a joyful anthem,
Each drank as great as wine! -
King Utter is a poet in disguise!Originally posted by King Utter:Poetry is fun,
Only hard to rhyme.
Every verse can be dense,
Though it hardly makes any sense.
I never finish writing any poem on time,
Charming neither a child nor any sensible one.
Vibrant stanza in the line,
Every word dancing on rhythm,
Recitals prancing on the mind,
Sung as a joyful anthem,
Each drunk as great as wine!
That was good.
I am really looking forward to organize another poetry competition in Oct/Nov 2004. -
My mistake, Each drank.
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Need me to edit for you?Originally posted by King Utter:My mistake, Each drank. -
Ah, thanks, but I took the pleasure of editing myself.Originally posted by DeadPoet:Need me to edit for you? -
Originally posted by DeadPoet:Brother Heng, to tell you the truth, I have never commented on such a ?technical? poem before.
But what I like about this poem is the sense of urgency and speed. I can visualize myself sitting beside the driver as he zooms along the race track. Cool. -
Pissed by an idiot,
Offended by his attitude,
Every word he spouts,
Testify his lack of magnitude,
I never see one as such,
Clearly his brain is not much.
Vengeance i seek,
Ever so sweet,
Retaliate u may try,
Sadly you will be fry,
End laughter will be mine! -
that, dear tare, was wonderful
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that, dear bear, was a display of my evilness!Originally posted by the Bear:that, dear tare, was wonderful