Poem: Elucidation.Beneath
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Poem: Elucidation.Beneath
Even the upturned bikes
Seem orderly enough,
When your floors are children
Of a standard grey heritage
Whose DNA is cheaply auctioned
Like a package for two
Flying to over-clichéd Bangkok.
Your flowers bloom not from the sun
But by the hand of ones
Who never bounded in your joy,
Much less know your domicile.
But they spring up like rabbits
Albeit no hutch they have here
And the ones who call you
Home.
May one day be like rats;
They who made the Titanic famous
And bid that old man cry.
Freedom for us saints,
No taint of the white power,
Not even a downy stick.
If colour is chaos
Let me wear thy shield
Before white death freezes us.
And we fear
We fear.
Seek that light
As the talking cock crows,
For posterity and Asterix,
Respect and Obelix
A healthy nest we must secure
Or our young be damned
From the suffocation of
Our
Leaden
Hands.
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After reading the poem, I feel that I have just view a slide show that reflects the reality (insanity?) of modernÂ’s society. Each stanza seems to consist of a short story but the poet has skillfully weaves them into a masterpiece.
I especially like the following portion,
‘If colour is chaos
Let me wear thy shield
Before white death freezes us.
And we fear
We fear.Â’
Fantastic!
But just curious, why Asterix and Obelix? Were you reading the comics when you were writing this poem?
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Asterix and Obelix were fighters for tiny Gaul against Roman tyranny.They were your archetypical man in the street, struggling against a faceless behemoth.
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OIC. But they have the magic potion.Originally posted by LazerLordz:Asterix and Obelix were fighters for tiny Gaul against Roman tyranny.They were your archetypical man in the street, struggling against a faceless behemoth.
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Well, what would be our magic potion?Hmm.Anyway, without the magic potion, they were as strong in spirit too.
