There's Nothing I'm Afraid Of
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There's Nothing I'm Afraid Of
The time has come
For you to go
Into the wild, wild world;
To grow your wings
Unfurl your sails
And dive for every pearl
YouÂ’ve come this far
To be this near
To promises so true;
So fly up high
And sail away
To seas and skies so blue
Remember child,
Remember well
The words you know by heart;
To make the difference
In this journey,
And make it from the start
The tools youÂ’ve gained
From years youÂ’ve trained
To be better than before;
And knowledge learned
From years youÂ’ve yearned
To wisen more and more
Pick up your step,
Breathe in fresh air,
Explore your own horizon;
Be first to respect,
Show dignity,
Success, be your destination
And if you feel
The whole wide world
Is coming down on you
Look up, youÂ’ll find
A helping hand,
To help you start anew
Never give up
Never give in
To failure and temptation;
Always look up,
Always live life
With endless good intention
Your time has come,
ItÂ’s time to show
The world what you are made of;
Unleash the wind,
Make rough the seas,
ThereÂ’s nothing youÂ’re afraid of. -
You can probably sell this inspirational piece to Hallmark
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A very encouraging piece. And a good attitude to have.
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Just curious, any special reason for using this particular rhyme scheme?
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nice piece. usual rhyming technique.
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I'm afraid this can only fool the unpolished minds
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Huh?Originally posted by InnoHippo:I'm afraid this can only fool the unpolished minds -
How about double 'huh?'Originally posted by InnoHippo:I'm afraid this can only fool the unpolished minds -
You may want to fine tune the fifth stanza.
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Thanks.Originally posted by DeadPoet:You may want to fine tune the fifth stanza.
I did feel awkward writing that particular stanza.
It didn't come out as smoothly as the rest.
FYI to all: This is meant to be read during the Graduation Ceremony for secondary school graduands where I work.
I needed to make it simple enough for them to understand and at the same time as inspirational as possible for them to 'go forth and conquer' so to speak.
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Oh I see.
In that case, if you donÂ’t mind, I would like to comment on a few other things.
1) I am fine with “The time has come” (L1) but not that comfortable with “Your time has come” (L43). Personally this line reminds me of another thing.
2) If you donÂ’t wish to make any changes in the fifth stanza, exchange places with the seventh stanza might help.
3) Replace the full stop with an exclamation mark in the last line.
4) I am not comfortable with “Look up, you’ll find” (L34) and “Always look up” (L40). Unless you have religion in mind, I prefer “Reach Out, you’ll find” or “Always be strong” or “Always be kind”, etc.
Just my two cent worth.
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4) I am not comfortable with “Look up, you’ll find” (L34) and “Always look up” (L40). Unless you have religion in mind, I prefer “Reach Out, you’ll find” or “Always be strong” or “Always be kind”, etc.
Or maybe "keep your head up" which is more in keeping with what you mean I think, although that might be a bit cliche, but that doesn't really matter for your purpose, Swordsman. -
That's a good idea.Originally posted by Bluesky_Liz:Or maybe "keep your head up" which is more in keeping with what you mean I think, although that might be a bit cliche, but that doesn't really matter for your purpose, Swordsman. -
pardon me ...... I was stucked with depressed moodOriginally posted by S-wordsman:How about double 'huh?'
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Feeling better now?Originally posted by InnoHippo:pardon me ...... I was stucked with depressed mood -
Hello S-wordsman. So how was the Graduation Ceremony?