loose ends. part 2.
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Loose ends 2
Your braying echoes off these hallowed walls
As your own castle is staked by pinheads
Blunt, crude , straight to the point that painful itch
Whitewash the smear off your cheek
So trade those nuts , bolts and washers
Attach and fasten , jobbing pirate!
Sweaty palms , the electric chair speaks
Ahoy!Ye be the next sweetcheeks.
Heart on the table,Thank ye .
Will whiter my flowers on your tombstone
After this little ride down sing song town
Down the plank ye go, trick or treat for ye.
Undermining your mind
"I think, therefore i am"
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Any comments ? areas for improvement? thank you! -
You can read this poem at the reading session on 12 August.
Should be very interesting.
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Mirumoto sanOriginally posted by Mirumoto:Loose ends 2
Your braying echoes off these hallowed walls
As your own castle is staked by pinheads
Blunt, crude , straight to the point that painful itch
Whitewash the smear off your cheek
So trade those nuts , bolts and washers
Attach and fasten , jobbing pirate!
Sweaty palms , the electric chair speaks
Ahoy!Ye be the next sweetcheeks.
Heart on the table,Thank ye .
Will whiter my flowers on your tombstone
After this little ride down sing song town
Down the plank ye go, trick or treat for ye.
Undermining your mind
"I think, therefore i am"
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Any comments ? areas for improvement? thank you!
am afraid i'm quite lost here.
there are images but they seem disjointed, as if pieces of a jigsaw puzzle strewn around.
"loose ends " suggest a relationship gone bad? -
Hey dsnake1, I think Mirumoto san is laughing at your comments now.Originally posted by dsnake1:Mirumoto san
am afraid i'm quite lost here.
there are images but they seem disjointed, as if pieces of a jigsaw puzzle strewn around.
"loose ends " suggest a relationship gone bad?
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is it?Originally posted by DeadPoet:Hey dsnake1, I think Mirumoto san is laughing at your comments now. 
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Yes!Originally posted by dsnake1:is it?