Being told to act natural

• Bluesky_Liz

  11 Jun 06, 17:10

  Being told to act natural
  
  A handshake; a smile, not too wide;
  say a few kind words to the camera;
  remember to mean what you say,
  and hold back the tide of vomit
  rising in your disemboweled insides.
  
  If somehow, something slips out,
  play it like that plastic 9mm
  in the top drawer of your desk,
  the one with the rubber bullets;
  they wonÂ’t hurt, or kill anyone.
  They bounce off balding heads,
  just like the things you wanted to say.
  
  
• alexkusu

  11 Jun 06, 17:12

  1st part pretty rough
  
  2nd part quite nice, smooth flow
• casino_king

  11 Jun 06, 17:24

  just a suggestion:
  
  Being told to act natural
  
  Offer a handshake; a smile
  and say a few words
  remembering to mean it.
  Hold back the vomit
  rising in you.
  
  Say it like that 9mm with you,
  the one with the rubber bullets.
  They wonÂ’t hurt, or kill anyone.
  They bounce off baldys,
  like your words.
  
  Sorry. if doing that was offensive.
• Bluesky_Liz

  11 Jun 06, 22:38

  Thanks for your feedback, guys.
  
  
• expiringpoet

  12 Jun 06, 16:44

  Originally posted by Bluesky_Liz:
  [b]Being told to act natural
  
  A handshake; a smile, not too wide;
  say a few kind words to the camera;
  remember to mean what you say,
  and hold back the tide of vomit
  rising in your disemboweled insides.
  
  If somehow, something slips out,
  play it like that plastic 9mm
  in the top drawer of your desk,
  the one with the rubber bullets;
  they wonÂ’t hurt, or kill anyone.
  They bounce off balding heads,
  just like the things you wanted to say.
  
  [/b]

  Interesting subject, forced artifice vs honesty. Enjoyed the wry humour and mocking tone in this one. I love the rubber bullet bouncing off balding heads imagery! Also like how the persona feels the futility of communication with people less intelligent in the 2nd stanza; the scoffing off of the "balding heads".
  tks for sharing and more pls!!!
  
• Bluesky_Liz

  13 Jun 06, 15:14

  Thanks, Expiring poet.
  
  
• DeadPoet

  14 Jun 06, 04:39

  Originally posted by Bluesky_Liz:
  [b]Being told to act natural
  
  A handshake; a smile, not too wide;
  say a few kind words to the camera;
  remember to mean what you say,
  and hold back the tide of vomit
  rising in your disemboweled insides.
  
  If somehow, something slips out,
  play it like that plastic 9mm
  in the top drawer of your desk,
  the one with the rubber bullets;
  they wonÂ’t hurt, or kill anyone.
  They bounce off balding heads,
  just like the things you wanted to say.
  
  [/b]

  Just curious, what is the setting?
• Bluesky_Liz

  14 Jun 06, 08:54

  The office.
  
  A bit more background: Some people were making some video at the workplace. That's kinda what inspired this.