Photo Poetry:Writer's Block
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Hi All,
I'm an aspiring writer...have not been writing for ages...but am now starting over again, cos somehow i feel life's not complete without writing somehow...
Anyway, here's my work which i submitted to www.kliqueimages.com an online photography forum, under my nic, medusa.
Would love to get ideas on improvement or comments on whether this works for you.
Thanks lots..
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ha...the writer's life. One tries to persevere.
Not bad. I really like the middle strophe, this line: "Even the delete stares back in mockery." -
Thanks for your kind comments, Liz
It helps to know that when i'm 'constipated' with my need to write something and the words cant be expressed; that other writers also go through the same problem. -
Hi expiringpoet,
your piece is really quite good. it describes the subject well.
ah, writer's block, we are sure to run into it sometimes. -
Welcome to DPS (S) expiring poet,
I find this poem quite entertaining. Simply love these two lines i.e.
"Even the delete stares back in mockery" and
“If in this story the start is the end”
So are you participating in the competition? -
thanks dsnake1...you know i visited your blog and read your writings...your poems and others i've been reading here really humbles me; they're all so good. I'll feel so happy if i can express myself half as effectively as you guys
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ur poem is a bit cliche'.....
well, to each his own
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tnx for the welcomeOriginally posted by DeadPoet:Welcome to DPS (S) expiring poet,
So are you participating in the competition?
yup, i read about the competition, its so exciting!
I found out about this forum just today to be honest and since then i've been furiously trying to read everything..haha!
but to join the competition; frankly i dont think my ideas are good enough or i'm quite "there" yet. for the meantime, suffice to just enjoy the works of others here
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thanks for your feedback...yeah, i've got alot to work on. The difficulty for me is finding a unique expression or style that i can call my own.Originally posted by Master -_-:ur poem is a bit cliche'.....
well, to each his own -
well, the journey is only a small step for me.. i have yet to attain the "nirvana" of literature...though i enjoy writing immensely...Originally posted by expiringpoet:thanks for your feedback...yeah, i've got alot to work on. The difficulty for me is finding a unique expression or style that i can call my own.
it's interesting to have a part of the "wali songo" in your blood huh...I really dun fathom the genealogy pattern of mine though..
I actually have 0.1% of Thai royalty in me
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expiringpoet,
you are not bad yourself.
just keep writing and your own style will evolve.
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wow 0.1%? better than nothing lahOriginally posted by Master -_-:I actually have 0.1% of Thai royalty in me -
Don't worry lah.Originally posted by expiringpoet:but to join the competition; frankly i dont think my ideas are good enough or i'm quite "there" yet. for the meantime, suffice to just enjoy the works of others here
It is just an informal competition. Main thing is to have fun and keep writing. This is not a workshop forum thus good or bad poems are all welcome. -
Hello expiringpoet,
I highly recommend you these three books,
1) Western Wind, An Introduction to Poetry, Fourth Edition, by John Frederick Nims & David Mason
2) The PoetÂ’s Companion, A Guide to the Pleasures of Writing Poetry by Kim Addonizio & Dorianne Laux
3) Best Words, Best Order, Essays on Poetry, Second Edition, by Stephen Dobyns
Check out Gilbert KohÂ’s blog The ReaderÂ’s Eye. You will love it. -
Wonderful, another photopoet.
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Thanks for the recommendations - i'll be sure to check it out. And yes, Gilbert Koh's poems are simply inspirationalOriginally posted by DeadPoet:Hello expiringpoet,
I highly recommend you these three books,
1) Western Wind, An Introduction to Poetry, Fourth Edition, by John Frederick Nims & David Mason
2) The PoetÂ’s Companion, A Guide to the Pleasures of Writing Poetry by Kim Addonizio & Dorianne Laux
3) Best Words, Best Order, Essays on Poetry, Second Edition, by Stephen Dobyns
Check out Gilbert KohÂ’s blog The ReaderÂ’s Eye. You will love it. -
Just a couple of comments --Originally posted by expiringpoet:
1) I think the poem stands well enough on its own. The pictures (to me at least) doesn't serve much of a purpose -- it neither enhance nor create an intriguing enough premise.
2) First stanza -- it's a matter of stylistics, but if you're going to use the basics of typing ("ASDF" is the first four-letter sequence on the QWERTY keyboard), make sure it's consistent. "BCDG" reads as a rather odd pairing with ASDF. Typically, it's JKL.
As Liz said, you have some nifty phrases -- keep it up.
Writer's block sucks monkey balls, innit?
To combat the block some time back, I wrote a poem, entitled "Deadlock".
It went something like this:I'd love to own an Olivetti, but I am sixty years too late.
Now that most of our writing's done from the computer, the images and associations formed have become remarkably similar, don't ya think?
So I raise a silver screen instead, who raises a pixelated brow
in finesse, and sneers at fickle filamental thought.
No longer content with waiting, he seeks pleasure with static.
Even grown-up words have ceased to make sense.
Adjectives like "staunch" and "profound" easily twist
themselves into dyslexic cameos, stilted and profane.
Elsewhere a bohemian crowd breaks gamely in song.
I shut it off, choosing to let restless hunger feed off
professional fear. It drips stealthily from unsteady fingers.
Raucuous twenty-somethings laugh and jeer, not caring
that I have wrapped myself in a wet, sweat blanket,
that I tremble as a gut-chill pierces the base of my spine,
and lingers in a needling pulsing shock.
For me, I whisper, for me, for me , for me,
over and over again as I will silent fingers to speak.
Where inspiration breaks apart chunnelling pistons,
and resets tousled junctions in delicate silicon circuits,
my dead calm lover evades. Coyly, I chase her in a labyrinth. -
I'd love to own an Olivetti, but I am sixty years too late.
I really like this, the imageries you've used is strong; particulary the second verse para..i love the line about the "restless hunger feeding off " the fear...
So I raise a silver screen instead, who raises a pixelated brow
in finesse, and sneers at fickle filamental thought.
No longer content with waiting, he seeks pleasure with static.
Even grown-up words have ceased to make sense.
Adjectives like "staunch" and "profound" easily twist
themselves into dyslexic cameos, stilted and profane.
Elsewhere a bohemian crowd breaks gamely in song.
I shut it off, choosing to let restless hunger feed off
professional fear. It drips stealthily from unsteady fingers.
Raucuous twenty-somethings laugh and jeer, not caring
that I have wrapped myself in a wet, sweat blanket,
that I tremble as a gut-chill pierces the base of my spine,
and lingers in a needling pulsing shock.
For me, I whisper, for me, for me , for me,
over and over again as I will silent fingers to speak.
Where inspiration breaks apart chunnelling pistons,
and resets tousled junctions in delicate silicon circuits,
my dead calm lover evades. Coyly, I chase her in a labyrinth.
i'm not so sure about the phrase"seeks pleasure with static"? Cant figure that one out. -
Ha. What happens when you leave your keyboard untouched for too long? A screensaver appears. That aside, I wanted to show how the screen mocks the writer's impotence by consorting with the enemy, in this instance, static -- which a natural state - as opposed to the writer's unnatural inability to produce work.Originally posted by expiringpoet:I really like this, the imageries you've used is strong; particulary the second verse para..i love the line about the "restless hunger feeding off " the fear...
i'm not so sure about the phrase"seeks pleasure with static"? Cant figure that one out. -
interesting thots! i'm waiting to read more of your worksOriginally posted by peebrain:Ha. What happens when you leave your keyboard untouched for too long? A screensaver appears. That aside, I wanted to show how the screen mocks the writer's impotence by consorting with the enemy, in this instance, static -- which a natural state - as opposed to the writer's unnatural inability to produce work. -
Some of them are already posted here, but if you don't mind ploughing through my blog (it's quite a mish-mash of stuff, truth be said) more are available there.
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You will need at least a week to read all the poems in her blog.Originally posted by expiringpoet:interesting thots! i'm waiting to read more of your works -
hmm...some people it seems dont have any issues with ideas and writing, unlike me...sigh.Originally posted by DeadPoet:You will need at least a week to read all the poems in her blog.
Ok, good news is - i have finished reading all of gilbert koh's as well as dsnake's...i'm halfway thru bluesky's as well as yours DP. I think i must have read thru Readersye at least twice..haha!
So i guess i do have the time to read thru peebrain's
peebrain, how do i get to your blog? -
peebrain.blogspot.com
It's mixed up with my everyday stuff, so you probably have to rifle through the archives month by month. Sorry about that. -
Hee hee your reply tells me that youÂ’ve not read my other blog.Originally posted by expiringpoet:hmm...some people it seems dont have any issues with ideas and writing, unlike me...sigh.
Ok, good news is - i have finished reading all of gilbert koh's as well as dsnake's...i'm halfway thru bluesky's as well as yours DP. I think i must have read thru Readersye at least twice..haha!
So i guess i do have the time to read thru peebrain's
peebrain, how do i get to your blog?