The Dance (2)
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hehe... very long never posted here liow... so here goes...
P.S. - renamed it with (2) cos i realised something i wrote some time ago had the same title...
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The Dance (2)
A lone shade
mutely waits, breathing
snake-like wisps spiraling
in the humid breeze.
A nameless tune
hummed softly, solo
against the distant chorus
of midnight traffic.
The corner window
on the top floor,
singled out
from the fluorescent parade.
Twin silhouettes
waltzes, on the lighted screen,
tangled and intertwined
in a liberated dance.
A callous epitaph
mourned to opened eyes,
dissipating the warmth
of the forgotten spectre. -
Originally posted by KittynMeow:
hmmmmmmm....can explain?
hehe... very long never posted here liow... so here goes...
P.S. - renamed it with (2) cos i realised something i wrote some time ago had the same title...
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[b] The Dance (2)
A lone shade
mutely waits, breathing
snake-like wisps spiraling
in the humid breeze.
A nameless tune
hummed softly, solo
against the distant chorus
of midnight traffic.
The corner window
on the top floor,
singled out
from the fluorescent parade.
Twin silhouettes
waltzes, on the lighted screen,
tangled and intertwined
in a liberated dance.
A callous epitaph
mourned to opened eyes,
dissipating the warmth
of the forgotten spectre.
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i'm always bad at interpretations (not that im any good at writing poetry,heh) -
the poem basically describes a scene where a person/spirit of a person stands on the outside, looking in through a window that he/she is familiar with. However, instead of one person i.e. the partner, he/she sees two people inside.Originally posted by ironoxideman:hmmmmmmm....can explain?
i'm always bad at interpretations (not that im any good at writing poetry,heh)
I made it a descriptive poem because rather than me telling the reader what the person/spirit is feeling, i would like to reader to imagine himself/herself as the protaganist and experience how it would feel if it happened to them...
it is a little voyeuristic... but it's the kind of feeling where sometimes we just want to watch silently what our loved ones or partners are doing... that's the kind of feeling I'm exploring in this one... -
My first impression was of a private eye on the job watching the misbehavings of the client's spouse.
Then i interpreted it as the spirit of a dead person returning home to see his/her former spouse dancing with another person.
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must have been the description of the cigarette smoke giving you that first impression... hahahahaOriginally posted by dsnake1:My first impression was of a private eye on the job watching the misbehavings of the client's spouse.
Then i interpreted it as the spirit of a dead person returning home to see his/her former spouse dancing with another person. -
yah, that's right. that's what i thought it was all about at first.Originally posted by KittynMeow:must have been the description of the cigarette smoke giving you that first impression... hahahaha