Shadows' Soul
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Yoiz so long
here goes for my Topics
Within the Shadows
In the Shadow
I cry
My heart bled
You look at me unflinchingly
In the Shadow
I reflect
I regret
I choose
In the Shadow
I dare
I stepped out
Out of your shadow
In the light
I smile a true one
I only smile for other
In your eye, I smile without caring
In the light
Finally I know where there is light
There will be shadows
But with courage, I face the shadows with a ever true smile -
Dark side of the Moon !Originally posted by MoonIce:Within the Shadows
In the Shadow
I cry
My heart bled
You look at me unflinchingly
In the Shadow
I reflect
I regret
I choose
In the Shadow
I dare
I stepped out
Out of your shadow
In the light
I smile a true one
I only smile for other
In your eye, I smile without caring
In the light
Finally I know where there is light
There will be shadows
But with courage, I face the shadows with a ever true smile
interesting piece.
yah, where there is light, there will be shadows. -
ah yeah recently face the dark side of the moon yeahOriginally posted by dsnake1:Dark side of the Moon !
interesting piece.
yah, where there is light, there will be shadows.
aw need to brush up on mine words liao
so long no compose liao
this one i thought out at the moment i type de kekeke
miss thinking
keep a lookout yah -
The darker the shadow, the brighter the light.
Good on you that you found the courage to face up and smile.
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yeah thanks =pOriginally posted by Bluesky_Liz:The darker the shadow, the brighter the light.
Good on you that you found the courage to face up and smile.
kekeke too bad working now otherwise i ll be thinking n typing away -
become a stronger person after self-reflection
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yupOriginally posted by InnoHippo:become a stronger person after self-reflection
expect more dark reflections -
Mirror of Reflections
None
I do not see
Am I
To the world I am blind
One
I do see
Am I
Beneath the shadows
Two
I observe
Am I
Underneath the moon
Three
I know
Am I
Out there in the universe
Four
I understood
Am I
With my dark soul
Five
I believe
Am I
Under the sun
Six
I cheers
Am I
Out there -
Interesting play with ambiquity of question/statement. Not all of them sound like they can go either way though. I see you are trying to keep in pattern, but it looks doing that is causing some of the lines to read like they're incomplete.
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hmmm...Originally posted by Bluesky_Liz:Interesting play with ambiquity of question/statement. Not all of them sound like they can go either way though. I see you are trying to keep in pattern, but it looks doing that is causing some of the lines to read like they're incomplete.
will keep it in mind
no kind of pattern for this one
kindda like going on n on all in a single thought
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wow, came out pretty fast with a reflection.Originally posted by MoonIce:Mirror of Reflections
None
I do not see
Am I
To the world I am blind
One
I do see
Am I
Beneath the shadows
Two
I observe
Am I
Underneath the moon
Three
I know
Am I
Out there in the universe
Four
I understood
Am I
With my dark soul
Five
I believe
Am I
Under the sun
Six
I cheers
Am I
Out there
seems you are trying to write the poem in a fixed pattern. which is not a bad thing. experiment with the form and shape of the work.
i like the gradual "count-up" from darkness to light. Hope is expressed among those words. -
agreed too.Originally posted by InnoHippo:become a stronger person after self-reflection -
hehehe
so long never think liao
now every flowing sia -
no need to think much.Originally posted by MoonIce:hehehe
so long never think liao
now every flowing sia
sometimes the words just flow out
that's called inspiration!
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yeahOriginally posted by dsnake1:no need to think much.
sometimes the words just flow out
that's called inspiration!
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don't feel embarassed.Originally posted by MoonIce:yeah
:embarassed::embarassed::embarassed:
the first draft of a poem is the creative part of the work because it comes from your heart and your head. ( i read this somewhere,).
after that it's all labour trimming and polishing it..
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=pOriginally posted by dsnake1:don't feel embarassed.
the first draft of a poem is the creative part of the work because it comes from your heart and your head. ( i read this somewhere,).
after that it's all labour trimming and polishing it..
i do trim otherwise i leave it raw
most of my works i trim once n no more.
eh where DP go arh kindda miss him wor =p -
DP's on a break from the internet due to real life busyness. He'll be back.
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hmm... say hiz to him on my behalf if i not around siaOriginally posted by Bluesky_Liz:DP's on a break from the internet due to real life busyness. He'll be back.
thanks. -
Tastes For Thoughts
Bittersweet you Taste
Moments of Sorrows pass
How Dark you are
My favourite Chocolate
Salty you Cry
Moments of Laughters pass
How Tiny and Innocent you are
My favourite Popcorn
Sourpuss you Look
Moments of tears pass
How Natural you are
My favourite Plum
Sweetly you smile
Moments of Seduction pass
How Colourful you are
My favourite Candy
All four taste of Life
Delights the Soul
How enticing you are
My favourite food -
All the tastes you describe, does seem to make the person this is addressed to seem rather colorful.
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Originally posted by MoonIce:
this is delicious
[b]Tastes For Thoughts
Bittersweet you Taste
Moments of Sorrows pass
How Dark you are
My favourite Chocolate
Salty you Cry
Moments of Laughters pass
How Tiny and Innocent you are
My favourite Popcorn
Sourpuss you Look
Moments of tears pass
How Natural you are
My favourite Plum
Sweetly you smile
Moments of Seduction pass
How Colourful you are
My favourite Candy
All four taste of Life
Delights the Soul
How enticing you are
My favourite food[/b] -
lolx mebbe i shall dedicate this to DP horOriginally posted by Bluesky_Liz:All the tastes you describe, does seem to make the person this is addressed to seem rather colorful. -
Originally posted by InnoHippo:this is delicious
thanks -
what happened to "hot"?
Hot you screamed
Moments of passion pass
How fiery you are
My favourite Laksa.