dusty keys

• preya

  19 Dec 05, 10:50

  Dusty keys
  
  the years lie thick on
  the last child in an emptied home
  sitting in a corner
  an old dream
  waiting...
  
  let's indulge in one last song
  i know you'd like to dance again
  even if it's only to a memory
  
  for you've grown old and gray
  my half-forgotten friend...
  we've all grown old and gray
  inside
  
  lift the cover in a cloud of age
  and the laughing notes are so familiar
  if just a bit
  out of place
  though my fingers have grown and changed
  the song is still there
  if just a bit
  faded...
  
  now all the strings have loosened half a note
  and the childish melody is playing
  in mournful minor
  instead
  
  then the movers drag even you out with a clatter
  and i can't hear the dusty keys
  anymore
  
  ~ - ~
  
  ps. just wondering, but does anyone have a blog where they post their poems? mine's xanga.com/gainel
• peebrain

  19 Dec 05, 12:13

  i do, but it's mixed in with everything else.
  
  peebrain.blogspot.com
• HENG@

  19 Dec 05, 12:19

  i have my site but its also mixed in with everything else, and not all my poems are there
  
  
• DeadPoet

  19 Dec 05, 19:39

  Feel free to check out my new blog Age of Insanity.
• dsnake1

  20 Dec 05, 10:04

  Originally posted by preya:
  Dusty keys
  
  the years lie thick on
  the last child in an emptied home
  sitting in a corner
  like an old dream
  waiting...
  
  

  preya,
  i think your poem has great potential. The first stanza grabs the reader's attention. The rest of the stanzas have a sad, melancholic note.
  But i'm not too sure about the theme, is it about an old pianist parting with his/her piano, which had been with him/her since a long time ago?
  
  This is a good piece, and i enjoyed reading it. Thanks.
  
  btw, some of us here have blogs, but not all stuff posted are poems. You can also check out my blog
• preya

  21 Dec 05, 20:12

  Originally posted by dsnake1:
  [b]
  preya,
  i think your poem has great potential. The first stanza grabs the reader's attention. The rest of the stanzas have a sad, melancholic note.
  But i'm not too sure about the theme, is it about an old pianist parting with his/her piano, which had been with him/her since a long time ago?
  

  thanks a lot for your compliment. i was using an old piano to symbolise childhood dreams; something that's been with the speaker for a long time, half-forgotten. the moving house symbolises moving on, growing up. so yeah, i was kinda aiming for that melancholic, wistful note. nice to know i hit it.
• dsnake1

  22 Dec 05, 00:18

  now that you have explained it, it really is a good analogy. Nice work, yah.