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• HENG@

  9 Sep 05, 01:43

  Suffocating fog.
  It swirls, it twirls,
  Dances of seduction,
  Memories of isolation.
  
  Sloshing pungent swamp,
  Gnarly branches twisted evil.
  Oppressive presence,
  All hope seems lost.
  
  Faint shimmers, rainbow colours.
  Grabs the eye like no other,
  Amongst the grime its brilliance shines,
  Intensely, delicately, penetrative.
  
  Bewitching luminous beholden the eyes,
  Gracefully as spirits fly.
  Waltz of the swan as pure as light.
  Prodigious joy as true as love.
  
  Mighty, conquering, searing,
  Brilliance consumes black.
  Fiery passions and re-energized soul,
  Bravely step forth as yet once more.
• DeadPoet

  13 Sep 05, 02:31

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  Suffocating fog.
  It swirls, it twirls,
  Dances of seduction,
  Memories of isolation.
  
  Sloshing pungent swamp,
  Gnarly branches twisted evil.
  Oppressive presence,
  All hope seems lost.
  
  Faint shimmers, rainbow colours.
  Grabs the eye like no other,
  Amongst the grime its brilliance shines,
  Intensely, delicately, penetrative.
  
  Bewitching luminous beholden the eyes,
  Gracefully as spirits fly.
  Waltz of the swan as pure as light.
  Prodigious joy as true as love.
  
  Mighty, conquering, searing,
  Brilliance consumes black.
  Fiery passions and re-energized soul,
  Bravely step forth as yet once more.

  Not bad. I see you use many strong words.
  
  Only one comment i.e. slightly too abstracts for me.
• HENG@

  15 Sep 05, 02:12

  Originally posted by DeadPoet:

  Not bad. I see you use many strong words.
  
  Only one comment i.e. slightly too abstracts for me.

  ah hehehe thanks. yea it was meant to be abstract. it conveys a feeling i guess
• KittynMeow

  16 Sep 05, 11:50

  sounds like a poem about hope conquering despair... kekekke
• coffeeortea

  16 Sep 05, 11:51

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  ah hehehe thanks. yea it was meant to be abstract. it conveys a feeling i guess

  most of the time, the abstract words give readers and viewers more ways to interpret the poem =D.
• Bluesky_Liz

  16 Sep 05, 20:00

  It does convey a lot of emotions it seems. I see the swamp, and then the swan in contrast with the darkness of what you described and maybe, somehow I thought, there are the will-o'-the-wisp. It is rather abstract but I enjoyed it.
• HENG@

  16 Sep 05, 21:00

  Originally posted by KittynMeow:

  sounds like a poem about hope conquering despair... kekekke

  it is. hope and love conquers despair.
• HENG@

  16 Sep 05, 21:02

  Originally posted by coffeeortea:

  most of the time, the abstract words give readers and viewers more ways to interpret the poem =D.

  true that.
• HENG@

  16 Sep 05, 21:03

  Originally posted by Bluesky_Liz:

  It does convey a lot of emotions it seems. I see the swamp, and then the swan in contrast with the darkness of what you described and maybe, somehow I thought, there are the will-o'-the-wisp. It is rather abstract but I enjoyed it.

  thanks glad u liked it.
• KittynMeow

  19 Sep 05, 10:00

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  it is. hope and love conquers despair.

  wah... din noe my guess was so accurate... kekeke... but I thot on the whole, the imagery of Hope over despair was stronger than love over despair... keke
• DeadPoet

  19 Sep 05, 18:49

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  ah hehehe thanks. yea it was meant to be abstract. it conveys a feeling i guess

  So is this poem for the competition?
• HENG@

  20 Sep 05, 23:44

  Originally posted by KittynMeow:

  wah... din noe my guess was so accurate... kekeke... but I thot on the whole, the imagery of Hope over despair was stronger than love over despair... keke

  hmm hehe love n hope goes hand in hand?
• HENG@

  20 Sep 05, 23:48

  Originally posted by DeadPoet:

  So is this poem for the competition?

  No its for a certain special someone
• Devil1976

  26 Sep 05, 18:28

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  Suffocating fog.
  It swirls, it twirls,
  Dances of seduction,
  Memories of isolation.
  
  Sloshing pungent swamp,
  Gnarly branches twisted evil.
  Oppressive presence,
  All hope seems lost.
  
  Faint shimmers, rainbow colours.
  Grabs the eye like no other,
  Amongst the grime its brilliance shines,
  Intensely, delicately, penetrative.
  
  Bewitching luminous beholden the eyes,
  Gracefully as spirits fly.
  Waltz of the swan as pure as light.
  Prodigious joy as true as love.
  
  Mighty, conquering, searing,
  Brilliance consumes black.
  Fiery passions and re-energized soul,
  Bravely step forth as yet once more.

  INTERESTING.
• HENG@

  27 Sep 05, 18:41

  Originally posted by Devil1976:

  INTERESTING.

  
  shhhhhhhh
  
• fudgester

  28 Sep 05, 13:14

  Originally posted by HENG@:

  No its for a certain special someone

  So... have you given it to her yet?
  
  Don't forget the wine and roses as well.
• KittynMeow

  28 Sep 05, 13:42

  Originally posted by fudgester:

  So... have you given it to her yet?
  
  Don't forget the wine and roses as well.

  and not to mention Godiva chocolates... sure impress one... kekeke
• DeadPoet

  28 Sep 05, 15:09

  Hello Heng, coffeeortea, and fudgester, do remember to vote for your favorite poems okay.
  
  Thank you.
  
• HENG@

  28 Sep 05, 17:09

  Originally posted by fudgester:

  So... have you given it to her yet?
  
  Don't forget the wine and roses as well.

  hehe yea i've given it to her. she's seen it here.
  
  but im not sayin who
  
  unfortunately cannot give chocos, wine or roses. we're 16 hours of flyin time apart.