A poem written by a friend
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A friend of mine recently wrote a poem. With his permission, I decided to post it here. Do you think it is a good poem? Please tell me how you feel about it.
Thanks.
Books
Books have helped and hurt me in my life
They have burnt a big hole in my small pocket
And made me a very poor man indeed...
Books have made me wiser, though still not wise enough
More critical, but still not critical enough
More conscious of the world at large, but still not conscious enough...
Books have made my tiny HDB flat a huge mess
But custom-made bookshelves cost too much to make
And bungalows cost too much to purchase
Books are for the rich men to buy
And for the poor men to borrow
That is what libraries are for...
Yet books-buying is an addiction that is hard to break
For books on hand for scribbling and highlighting are great
Thus making the poor man poorer and poorer all his life.
By H.S. -
Umm, DP , let's say i am not too impressed by this poem, sorry.
there's not much rhyme and rhythm, and it does not look like free verse.
maybe a rewrite, with chosen words, helps.
Books might bankrupt your pocket, but it sure enriches your knowledge. U can say there is the internet, why buy books. Because it is a personal thing
and like the writer says "For books on hand for scribbling and highlighting are great ", -
Originally posted by dsnake1:
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Umm, DP , let's say i am not too impressed by this poem, sorry.
there's not much rhyme and rhythm, and it does not look like free verse.
maybe a rewrite, with chosen words, helps.
Books might bankrupt your pocket, but it sure enriches your knowledge. U can say there is the internet, why buy books. Because it is a personal thing
and like the writer says [b]"For books on hand for scribbling and highlighting are great ",
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Place books in your mind, not your bookshelves
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Originally posted by dsnake1:
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Umm, DP , let's say i am not too impressed by this poem, sorry.
there's not much rhyme and rhythm, and it does not look like free verse.
maybe a rewrite, with chosen words, helps.
Books might bankrupt your pocket, but it sure enriches your knowledge. U can say there is the internet, why buy books. Because it is a personal thing
and like the writer says [b]"For books on hand for scribbling and highlighting are great ",
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i dun see much elements of a poem in tis one.... hmm... issit a poem then? -
I can't decide if this is a poem or not.
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like dat, how to say if it's a good poem or not?Originally posted by DeadPoet:I can't decide if this is a poem or not. 
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Originally posted by tare:
Anyway this is his first poem.
like dat, how to say if it's a good [b]poem or not? [/b]
I think not too bad liao lah. Just sound a bit too prose like.