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• fallin

  10 Jul 05, 23:34

  in shattered pieces,
  the broken shards.
  a fallen glory.
  imperfection.
  
  the minute cracks.
  An unseen presence
  slowly awakening.
  imperfection
  
  those quiet words
  like a bladeless knife
  inducing a silent torture
  imperfection.
  
  Paiseh,help me look out cliches can? Presently after reading something,I'm really terrified of cliques.
  
  EDITED,paiseh,paiseh,crappy eng
• dsnake1

  11 Jul 05, 15:02

  Originally posted by fallin:

  Paiseh,help me look out cliques can? Presently after reading something,I'm really terrified of cliques.

  Hey, DP, your forte.
• Neutrend

  11 Jul 05, 15:03

  what is cliques?
• dsnake1

  11 Jul 05, 15:27

  Originally posted by Neutrend:

  what is cliques?

  A clique is a small exclusive group of people or club.
  
  I think what fallin meant was "cliche" which means "a trite or overused expression or idea which have lost much of its expressive force."
  something like " easy as pie", " bed of roses"
• Neutrend

  11 Jul 05, 15:29

  Oh ic.. maybe you could make one group urself?
  
  
• dsnake1

  11 Jul 05, 15:31

  Originally posted by Neutrend:

  Oh ic.. maybe you could make one group urself?
  
  

  a clique of mad poets?
• Neutrend

  11 Jul 05, 15:48

  LOL, it will be nice...
• DeadPoet

  12 Jul 05, 00:51

  Originally posted by fallin:

  in shattered pieces,
  the broken shards.
  a fallen glory.
  imperfection.
  
  the minute cracks.
  An unseen presence
  slowly awakening.
  imperfection
  
  those quiet words
  like a bladeless knife
  inducing a silent torture
  imperfection.
  
  Paiseh,help me look out cliches can? Presently after reading something,I'm really terrified of cliques.
  
  EDITED,paiseh,paiseh,crappy eng

  Hello fallin,
  
  Basically clichés are overused phrases. They used to provoke strong emotions but now lost their magic.
  
  Some examples are,
  
  bitter end
  cool as cucumber
  hard as nail
  drenched by light
  burning heart
  endless horizon
  eternal sleep
  grim reaper
  shadow of death, etc.
  
  If you used too many of them, your poem will become very boring. The problem is some clichés are hard to identify because we are so use to them.
  
  Take your poem for example. Do you think there is anything new with these phrases,
  
  shattered pieces
  fallen glory
  unseen presence
  bladeless knife
  silent torture, etc.?
  
  Not really right?
  
  By the way, want to share with us what youÂ’ve read?
  
  There are some links regarding clichés in the “Introduction” thread, feel free to check them out.
  
  
• DeadPoet

  12 Jul 05, 00:56

  Originally posted by dsnake1:

  I think what fallin meant was "cliche" which means "a trite or overused expression or idea which have lost much of its expressive force."
  something like " easy as pie", " bed of roses"

  Yup. Actually, I don't really mind if they are only one or two of them in a poem. But too many of them, the poem will becomes really boring. Nothing new, nothing original.
  
  
• DeadPoet

  12 Jul 05, 00:58

  Originally posted by Neutrend:

  LOL, it will be nice...

  Welcome to DPS (S) Neutrend.
  
  Feel free to look around. By the way do you read/write poetry?
• fallin

  12 Jul 05, 20:24

  *bows head* thanks DP senior. paiseh,still very noob. still working on it.
• tare

  13 Jul 05, 12:33

  DP said it well ... again!
  
  frankly, i read liao no understand wat u r trying to say leh.... hmmm..... then again do ppl understand my poem??
• DeadPoet

  14 Jul 05, 02:15

  Originally posted by fallin:

  *bows head* thanks DP senior. paiseh,still very noob. still working on it.

  We are all newbie here lah.
  
  By the way can share with us what you've read regarding clichés? Thanks.
• DeadPoet

  14 Jul 05, 02:17

  Originally posted by tare:

  DP said it well ... again!
  
  frankly, i read liao no understand wat u r trying to say leh.... hmmm..... then again do ppl understand my poem??

  Er... what poem?