I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow...

• pipi & poot-poot

  24 Jun 05, 01:47

  
  
  I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow,
  Through life and in decayÂ…
  In search of the perfect being,
  Whose love will never strayÂ…
  
  I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow,
  Every hour of every dayÂ…
  Afraid to even close my eyes,
  Struggle not to lose my wayÂ…
  
  I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow,
  No matter come what mayÂ…
  To reach her before my soul departs,
  SheÂ’s the light in my world of greyÂ…
  
  I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow,
  On the deathbed where I layÂ…
  Drew my last breathe with a silent tear,
  IÂ’d pursue you againÂ…no matter what they sayÂ…
• DeadPoet

  24 Jun 05, 11:41

  The thing about clichés and abstractions is that most serious poets avoid them like plague. But for most of us, we don’t really give them much thought. We just want to write, and write, and write, and write…
  
  But of course if you are sending your poems for competitions, you need to be original, to stand out from the rest (thousands of them). You need to avoid having too many clichés and abstractions around. That is why I put in so much effort to remind myself, and hopefully some of you here, to avoid them.
  
  However, since this is DPS (S), I am glad to say I really like this piece.
  
  Thanks for the read pipi & poot-poot.
  
• InnoHippo

  24 Jun 05, 11:50

  this cliché piece is nice
• DeadPoet

  24 Jun 05, 11:52

  Originally posted by InnoHippo:

  this cliché piece is nice

  Nice right?
  
  Want to try writing poems?
• InnoHippo

  24 Jun 05, 12:26

  Originally posted by DeadPoet:

  Nice right?
  
  Want to try writing poems?

  no poetic talent leh
• dsnake1

  24 Jun 05, 22:57

  Originally posted by pipi & poot-poot:

  I pursue an angelÂ’s shadow,
  No matter come what mayÂ…
  To reach her before my soul departs,
  SheÂ’s the light in my world of greyÂ…
  
  

  Hi pipi & poot-poot
  nice picture!
  nice poem too, i like it. thanks.
  "SheÂ’s the light in my world of greyÂ…".. reminds me of someone..
  
• pipi & poot-poot

  25 Jun 05, 00:12

  Originally posted by DeadPoet:

  The thing about clichés and abstractions is that most serious poets avoid them like plague. But for most of us, we don’t really give them much thought. We just want to write, and write, and write, and write…
  
  But of course if you are sending your poems for competitions, you need to be original, to stand out from the rest (thousands of them). You need to avoid having too many clichés and abstractions around. That is why I put in so much effort to remind myself, and hopefully some of you here, to avoid them.
  
  However, since this is DPS (S), I am glad to say I really like this piece.
  
  Thanks for the read pipi & poot-poot.
  

  Hey big guy~ u know me....
  
  Always doin dings w/o much tots....go wif d feel ya ?
  
  
• pipi & poot-poot

  25 Jun 05, 00:14

  Originally posted by InnoHippo:

  this cliché piece is nice

  Originally posted by dsnake1:

  Hi pipi & poot-poot
  nice picture!
  nice poem too, i like it. thanks.
  "SheÂ’s the light in my world of greyÂ…".. reminds me of someone..
  

  thks guys ~
• SpeedStar

  25 Jun 05, 00:21

  Originally posted by pipi & poot-poot:

  thks guys ~

  wah wirte poems leh. Write it to sian zharbo har??
• pipi & poot-poot

  25 Jun 05, 00:22

  Originally posted by SpeedStar:

  wah wirte poems leh. Write it to sian zharbo har??

  Write 2 sian u lor ~
  
  How's ber-ber ?