Has Love Been Forgotten ?
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Has Love Been Forgotten ?
The day I fall in Love
The World seems to be turning the way I wanted
Everything so Beautiful
So Much Happiness to be shared
Even faced with the toughest difficulty
There bound to be a way to solve it
So Happy was that day
I almost forget who I am
But as time goes by
We both became weary
So tired and so sad
Everything don't seems to turn out right
But have we forgotten
How happy we used to be
The common love we shared
The happiness this union brought
Remember when we first met
Something sparkled in our eyes
It's not something physical
Where we can see or feel
It is a feeling deep inside
Inside the heart of two people in love
Something we both cherish
Where joy and happiness is abundance
For every words that was spoken
Is fill with endless love
The love that is so great
It seems it will never run out
The sight of each other
Always bring on a smile
With it was a glimpse of light
Tiny bit that can outshine the sun
Remember the tenderness we felt
The promises we made to each other
With so much to hold on and cherish
We must persevere on
Even in times of trouble
We have each other to rely on
To Love, to care and to trust
To have someone there for you
Then why let this love dies ?
Why let it starve in hunger ?
Hunger for Love and care
To be part of each other forever
Must it wait till love is gone
Then we understand it
Or have you lose the love you once felt
Or has Love been forgotten -
Hello jusgal this is a beautiful poem!! I really enjoy reading it as the lines flows from one stanza to another.
Not to say that you previous poems are bad but I can see that you are improving. Some suggestions, maybe you can cut down some words that are unnecessary and tried to make used of imagery more often. Just to touch it up a bit. -
Nice
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thanksOriginally posted by DeadPoet:Hello jusgal this is a beautiful poem!! I really enjoy reading it as the lines flows from one stanza to another.
Not to say that you previous poems are bad but I can see that you are improving. Some suggestions, maybe you can cut down some words that are unnecessary and tried to make used of imagery more often. Just to touch it up a bit. -
You are welcome.Originally posted by jusgal:thanks
Wah you change your avatar again. So fast.
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how about this poem below...
A love came by,
through the hurt and betray
through the tears and heartache
where the love will head to ?
The lover is here
what love will it bring ?
signs of a happy future
or another ending with heart break ?
Love have came and gone
leaving happiness and sorrow
bring yet another experience in life
weather it comes or goes
Touch mine heart with love
showering me with care and warm
A love..
came and gone like wind -
cry from the unborn
Before i started smelling the open air
i was flushed out
feeling helpless...
i end my life even before i could start mine
why am i not given the chance to even see the world
if only i had the chance
i tell u my dad & mom i love u -
Love cannot be forgotten. It just fade with times.
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Nice, especially the last two lines. By the way leong_tx, think you can start a new thread to post your poem?Originally posted by leong_tx:how about this poem below...
A love came by,
through the hurt and betray
through the tears and heartache
where the love will head to ?
The lover is here
what love will it bring ?
signs of a happy future
or another ending with heart break ?
Love have came and gone
leaving happiness and sorrow
bring yet another experience in life
weather it comes or goes
Touch mine heart with love
showering me with care and warm
A love..
came and gone like wind
Thanks. -
Originally posted by jusgal:
Yes! This is the kind of poem I was talking about.
[b]cry from the unborn
Before i started smelling the open air
i was flushed out
feeling helpless...
i end my life even before i could start mine
why am i not given the chance to even see the world
if only i had the chance
i tell u my dad & mom i love u [/b]
My kind of poem.
But you don't have to follow my advice. Follow your heart. -
i followed the heart of a aborted babyOriginally posted by DeadPoet:Yes! This is the kind of poem I was talking about.
My kind of poem.
But you don't have to follow my advice. Follow your heart. -
e.. start a new threat ??Originally posted by DeadPoet:Nice, especially the last two lines. By the way leong_tx, think you can start a new thread to post your poem?
Thanks.
well i just like to read and at times write something...
n thats why u see me register this long but this little post...
but if u like it well u can post it no problem -
Okay.Originally posted by leong_tx:e.. start a new threat ??
well i just like to read and at times write something...
n thats why u see me register this long but this little post...
but if u like it well u can post it no problem