hey~~
wonder wat the twist is? coming up in the next few parts?
unless u're referring to a peson chasing another that's already married, in this society, that's no twist. it almost seems normal nowadays.
anyway, well written, and i might say, ur lead characters have very unique names
i was a little lost between the quick transition of van in her office with the flowers, then to raynor training his men, and then his memory of the night before. then i figured that's why he was "thinking about something else" in the car.
ok continue writing i sure read one!
