just trying out

• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 01:42

  erm...last nite...i composed a poem....and out of nowhere and out of no idea...i mean...i really dunnoe how did i get it lor...
  ok...it goes like this....
  
  title: For You
  
  Kissing, hugging , cuddling.
  That's what we always do in bed
  It was beyond other's understanding
  Since the day we first met.
  You held me in your loving arms
  and kissed me so passionately.
  Your lips were so gentle
  that I actually melted
  and almost out of breadth.
  This is my very first poem
  From BB to Darling.
  That's what we always do in bed,
  Kissing, hugging and cuddling.
  
  well??comments?
  i noe its...erm...mushy lar...but..keke
  how many points?
• Master -_-

  30 Mar 03, 01:44

  spelling and grammar mistakes
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 01:50

  Originally posted by Master -_-:

  spelling and grammar mistakes

  like?
• Master -_-

  30 Mar 03, 01:51

  Originally posted by aHGer^83:

  erm...last nite...i composed a poem....and out of nowhere and out of no idea...i mean...i really dunnoe how did i get it lor...
  ok...it goes like this....
  
  title: For You
  
  Kissing, hugging , cuddling.
  That's what we always do in bed
  It was beyond other's understanding
  Since the day we first met.
  You held me in your loving arms
  and kissed me so passionate. (passionately)
  Your lips were so gentle
  that I actually melted
  and almost out of breadth. (breath)
  This is my very first poem
  From BB to Darling.
  That's what we always do in bed,
  Kissing, hugging and cuddling.
  
  well??comments?
  i noe its...erm...mushy lar...but..keke

  
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 01:53

  Originally posted by Master -_-:

  
  enlighten me pls...
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 01:56

  the breath part...
  me everyday see the SARS symptoms...haha~ dat part is rite spelling...
  
  but the passionate part....THANX~
• Master -_-

  30 Mar 03, 01:57

  Originally posted by aHGer^83:

  the breath part...
  me everyday see the SARS symptoms...haha~ dat part is rite spelling...
  
  but the passionate part....THANX~

  huh? breadth as in sides of a polygon?
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 01:58

  Originally posted by Master -_-:

  huh? breadth as in sides of a polygon?

  yar...
• Master -_-

  30 Mar 03, 01:59

  Originally posted by aHGer^83:

  yar...

  errr ok
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 04:30

  
  bo nang support?
• xelat1

  30 Mar 03, 06:57

  *clap *clap
• jOhO

  30 Mar 03, 23:38

  simple, consise and heartfelt obviously~~!!
  
  wonder when a ger ger will write something like this for me.
  
  eh write some more leh.. make sure write until he melt....! he see already anot?
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 23:39

  
• aHGer^83

  30 Mar 03, 23:39

  Originally posted by jOhO:

  simple, consise and heartfelt obviously~~!!
  
  wonder when a ger ger will write something like this for me.
  
  eh write some more leh.. make sure write until he melt....! he see already anot?

  not so soon...keke...in 2 weeks time...so dun make this topic top 50 okie?