8 words poetry (rebirth)
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great stuff. simple and pure.Originally posted by De|usi0n:behold, phantom knights
we shall strike tonite
pound fear into their eyes
with our twin lances might
the rebels, they shall fight
but our force will strive
under the stars creepy light
return when the sun shine bright -
oh man..Originally posted by De|usi0n:behold, phantom knights
we shall strike tonite
pound fear into their eyes
with our twin lances might
the rebels, they shall fight
but our force will strive
under the stars creepy light
return when the sun shine bright
let's just say u did MUCH better than i... those words seem to be sticking their tongues out at me!
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i think the pre-conceived theme of star wars and medieval times might have gotten the better of u. u can always follow the flow.Originally posted by jOhO:i'm trying this now.. and i dun seem to be able to get anything out of it! -
i think you shouldn't have mention star wars.... cos every time i look at the word 'force' all i could think of is.. 'MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU'Originally posted by JLennon:i think the pre-conceived theme of star wars and medieval times might have gotten the better of u. u can always follow the flow. 
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ya know, it doesn't help that i don't think much star wars.. NOR star trek. they say u HAVE to be a fan of one or the other rite? not for me! hahaha..Originally posted by JLennon:i think the pre-conceived theme of star wars and medieval times might have gotten the better of u. u can always follow the flow. -
i purposely one....Originally posted by lilogirl:i think you shouldn't have mention star wars.... cos every time i look at the word 'force' all i could think of is.. 'MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU' . this is writing amidst distractions. -
then all the more it should be easier!!!! my 8 words are v simple one....Originally posted by jOhO:ya know, it doesn't help that i don't think much star wars.. NOR star trek. they say u HAVE to be a fan of one or the other rite? not for me! hahaha.. -
can is can lar.. but i'd be ashamed to post it up! ahhahaOriginally posted by JLennon:then all the more it should be easier!!!! my 8 words are v simple one.... -
i betta get crackin on it too.Originally posted by jOhO:can is can lar.. but i'd be ashamed to post it up! ahhaha -
Here's mine. A tribute to Alexandre Dumas' band of brothers:Originally posted by JLennon:1. force
2. twins
3. fear
4. knight
5. strikes
6. rebel
7. star
8. return
One for all and all for one,
the motto that the 4 men chant.
A mighty force with little fear,
they are the kingÂ’s musketeers.
DÂ’Artagnan, their gleaming light,
more valiant than an English knight;
Athos, with his love for God,
once a monk now holds a sword;
Porthos, our suave rotund star,
man of all fashion and wine bar;
Aramis, renown for his deadly strikes,
and a fleur-de-lis he much dislikes.
They serve only the King of France
and no rebel can stand a chance.
Closer than twins, bound by fate,
the brothersÂ’ return, all Paris await. -
A forceful arm, with a sword,
it strikes a knight in a battle fight,
The fear of death came to mind,
When that rebel outrun me in sight,
Saw my twin on the ground, I shouted " Hey, that's me, why i am lying there?"
"You are done" a angel say, "come, let return to your father laps"
"How about my family?" I asked.
"See that star? Shinning bright, That 's you and will always be by their side"........... -
wah !! all so well done..make me look like an amature...well, i am..haha
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As the shooting STAR falls from the sky
The galiant KNIGHT rides through the wind
Searching traces of the evil TWINS
Passing each day with trembling FEAR
For if thee should start the deemed REBEL
No FORCE could vanquish the worst untold
Thus now only a silent STRIKE
Can he RETURN with honour and pride
AHAHa...not done by me ... by a friend ..just sharing with u all ..i full of craps one cannot write this type of stuffs~
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I have officially lost my mind...
but I still wanted to give it a try, and therefore, here it is...
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Have you ever wondered,
If we are alone...?
that there is a parallel universe,
almost a twin world with our own...
We live in logic, and they... in dreams.
for that is where we belong...
too fear-stricken to cross those realms,
into their faery songs...
That world is like a return of faery tales,
where snow white is rebellious and gets into fights...
where words can spin and melodies spills,
and the damsels saves their tarnished knights
A world where all seems wrong,
yet forced to be right...
Somewhere in the mists of stars tonight...
Have you ever wondered... ...
...What would it be like...?
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Originally posted by En':
Have you ever wondered,
I have officially lost my mind...
but I still wanted to give it a try, and therefore, here it is...
If we are alone...?
that there is a parallel universe,
almost a [b]twin world with our own...
We live in logic, and they... in dreams.
for that is where we belong...
too fear-stricken to cross those realms,
into their faery songs...
That world is like a return of faery tales,
where snow white is rebellious and gets into fights...
where words can spin and melodies spills,
and the damsels saves their tarnished knights
A world where all seems wrong,
yet forced to be right...
Somewhere in the mists of stars tonight...
Have you ever wondered... ...
...What would it be like...?
[/quote][color=9900ff][/b][/quote] i like ur world. just hope that the guys can ascend to tai-taidom there. very refreshing poem u have there. -
no inspiration.Originally posted by JLennon:1. force
2. twins
3. fear
4. knight
5. strikes
6. rebel
7. star
8. return
anyway me dun really like star wars mah, i think star trek nicer
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any new words ?
find it interesting leh -
why don't u come up with the words? i been too busy to do anything.. partly becos i have a new toy.. ehehOriginally posted by Transmission:any new words ?
find it interesting leh
go ahead and give us your 8 words.
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Originally posted by JLennon: i like ur world. just hope that the guys can ascend to tai-taidom there. very refreshing poem u have there.
I've always liked my world better, too!
Anyway, since the style of the poem is like the one I first made when starting to play these games, and since no one is giving any words, here were the first 8 words that started hooking me to this thingy...
1) Classic
2) seal
3) enchant
4) parade
5) chocolate
6) immense
7) chrysanthemum
8[/i]) corner
Let's see who would dare to try eh? (Mind you, I got those words a long time ago, and I abhored #7
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gawd...... u lil wicked girl.........Originally posted by En':7) chrysanthemum -
kor...Originally posted by JLennon:gawd...... u lil wicked girl.........
...ni bu li xmz le... -
narz: pai seh pai seh.... kan dao ni jiu you ling gan le!!!Originally posted by En':1) Classic
2) seal
3) enchant
4) parade
5) chocolate
6) immense
7) chrysanthemum
8[/i]) corner
I enjoy strolling when the day begins to fade
from my workplace in centrepoint to orchard parade.
Its definitely not your classic stroll in the park,
where u walk ur dog and munch chocolate till dark.
Faces of many both local and foreigner
emerging from every nook, street and corner
Taxis buzzing in their coat of chrysanthemum,
furiously pushing their fees to the maximum.
An immense picture of the human creation
one filled with a kaleidoscope of emotion.
The sights i see never fail to enchant me,
wishing that jOhO can seal these scenes for free.
PS: the jOhO referred here is a talented man with a great camera or a great man with a talented camera. -
Originally posted by JLennon:narz: pai seh pai seh.... kan dao ni jiu you ling gan le!!!
I enjoy strolling when the day begins to fade
from my workplace in centrepoint to orchard parade.
Its definitely not your classic stroll in the park,
where u walk ur dog and munch chocolate till dark.
Faces of many both local and foreigner
emerging from every nook, street and corner
Taxis buzzing in their coat of chrysanthemum,
furiously pushing their fees to the maximum.
An immense picture of the human creation
one filled with a kaleidoscope of emotion.
The sights i see never fail to enchant me,
wishing that jOhO can seal these scenes for free.
PS: the jOhO referred here is a talented man with a great camera or a great man with a talented camera.
Nice try JL
and here's mine, from a long time ago...[/quote]
Forget all the stories and classic tales,
of knights and dragons and people that kills...
I'll show you a land where logic seals,
a place where enchanted magic appeals.
There we'll watch parades of honey bees,
and taste the chocolates growing on trees.
We'll witness love's immense hunger
And try on snow white's crysanthemum slippers.
This land is right around the corner
if you'd only follow me!
And all it takes to reach there, my friend,
is only when you believe...[/quote]
I wonder wat others would come up with -
u guys are great .... really...
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If u write often, u can be great tooOriginally posted by Transmission:u guys are great .... really...
I read yours, perhaps by changing some words, you could get the flow of the whole poem, coz ur idea's there, but it seemed to me that the flow wasn't too smooth...
erm... pls don't take it to heart or anything...
Though, with practise, you could be really good